Thursday, October 22, 2009

chapter 3

Chapter 3
Before we go on to the hunt for the shadows from John’s dream, let’s look at some people who have been changed by John. First we look at the warden. Before he met John he lived in a very harsh environment growing up. His father was Military man with the mind of a Spartan general. He tried to train the warden like a drill sergeant and want his son to become the perfect solider. The warden’s childhood was very hard because of this; his father would beat him and teach him many styles of fighting. With this the warden didn’t have many friends, he didn’t have time for school, the only thing he had to do in life was to become a soldier and protect his country. When the warden reached 16 he had sort of a midlife crisis if you were to say. He went mad and killed his father during a training exercise on training one’s mind. During this snap he killed his mother as well thinking that she was one of his father’s “old war buddies that was there to help with training the boy”. After he snapped back child services took care of him and put him into foster care. Nothing happened after that, except he met a girl, got married, had kids, and got a job working at a jail. He became quite known at the jailhouse for being able to take down inmates twice his size. For being able to foil any plan conjured up by the cleverest of thieves there. Soon he started to get promoted to the warden of the prison him and his family were living life quite easily, however until John made a visit to the prison. John was the first and only prisoner that had ever gotten away from the warden, so to get back at him he wanted to prove that this man wasn’t insane, that he was just putting up an act to try and get out of there. He had made a request to see him before he left so he could launch his trap on him. However right when John entered the warden felt a chill go down his spine, he felt as if the devil was in the room with him. When John took a seat the warden looked him straight into his eyes and saw nothing. John’s Eyes reminded him of a dolls eyes; dead soulless devoid of life. Right at the moment the warden had looked at John’s eyes, John had sprung his trap. For you see John knew that the warden had found out about him so he wanted to play a game with him. The two soon teleported to a world of darkness, a world devoid of life with only floating rocks there. “Listen up Warden we are going to play a game” said John, “if you win I stay, if I win you become my new pet understand”. The warden shook his head in acknowledgement. Right with that head movement a shadow came out of him a sort of clone of the warden, but this one was all black and white except for his eyes they were blood red. “The game is has one rule protect this ball from him then you win understand” said John. John pulled a gun out and fired in the air, with that the clone charged the warden and tired to get the ball. The warden grabbed the clone’s leg and threw him very far away. This made John give out a small smirk, soon the ball was in the warden’s hands. “You have one hour to keep it safe and about 10 minutes have passed and your clone is coming back awfully fast I suggest hiding it”. The warden tried to hide the ball but there was nowhere to hide to hide it so he put it behind him and put his fists up as if to say to the clone and john “come and get it”. The clone charged him and then matched his fighting stance, this surprised the warden and then the fight began. The warden sent out a massive punch that would knock out anyone but the clone was able to side step it with ease as if the warden was doing it in slow motion. Now it was the clone’s turn to strike he side kick the warden and it made him hit the ground hard. The warden had never fought someone as powerful as him he knew that this was going to be a hard battle but he knew had to win at any cost. The clone was almost at the ball when the warden grabbed his leg again but this time the clone knew better. With his other leg he kicked the warden in the face, breaking the warden’s nose in the process. The warden was in great amounts of pain after this blow, but he sucked it up and got back up on his feet. Right when he was on his feet again he tried to fight the clone again. However something was different for every blow he sent the clone would either block it, use the same kind of technique to cancel it out, or just dodge it. It was as if the warden didn’t have a chance in hell of winning this fight. But the warden couldn’t admit to himself about losing he had too much at stake if he lost that meant what he took the most pride in was about just dwindle away to nothingness. The warden through a punch and the clone sidestepped him and grabbed his arm and threw him onto the ball and popped it. John gave out a dark laugh and screamed out “AWWWW DIDN’T THE WARDEN LOSE I THOUGHT YOU WERE THE BEST AT CATCHING CRIMINALS WELL I GUESS NOT YOU FAILED AT IT AND NOW WHAT YOU PRIDE YOURSELF IN IS NOW NOTHING”. Now in real life the warden is back in his body but something is different on his left eye its red with a black pupil. This was a sign that he now belonged to John.

Thursday, October 15, 2009

help wanted

looking for someone to go over my chapters and give oppinion please only nice coments though. no mean comnets there is a such thing as bad advice.

bios for the bad guys

Character bios: bad guys The Seven deadly sins
Pride: he is a balding man in his mid-40s and he will do anything to keep it a secret. Even though it’s obvious that he’s bald. His dad was a huge general and forced him to be like him. He believes in the Spartan and bushido way. Finally his mark is on his left eye.
Envy: She is a young woman in her 20’s that is very shy and meek. Her parents didn’t really pay too much attention to her just her brother. Her brother is a very bright person and is considered the golden child in the family. While she is the black sheep in the family. She doesn’t really talk that much and most of the time has her face buried in a book. Her mark is on her forehead
Gluttony: a very tall man with a bigger belly. He is a man in his mid 50’s who loves eating. He will even out of the garbage. He has a habit of bugging people when they are eating and try to see if they will share it. Once they do share it he will eat the whole thing in one bite. He loves eating foreign foods out of things he never had. However now he likes eating people after trying some new meat from john. His mark is on his tongue.
Greed: a very short old man who always wears a tux. He thinks he is royalty even though he’s a bum. He loves money and loves to spend it on stupid things. He will do anything for money even steal. He is great at lying and breaking into places. He is a basic conman and loves money. His mark is on his palms.
Wrath: An extremely violent man and he’s the reason for the insane asylum. He used to be one of the greatest fighters in the world until he started having split personalities each one brought out when he listens to a certain type of music. Each personality has its own style of fighting as well for example when he listens to Mexican rock he will turn into a personality of a stereotype Mexican and fight vale tudo style. He also looks like a rave person when not listening to music. His marks are on his hands and feet.
Sloth: an extremely smart and great athlete. However he likes to sleep and is very lazy. He will make several excuses to get out of working or doing anything that requires him to get up. His marks are on his eye lids, when he nods off during anything it looks like he’s still awake.
Lust: very beautiful women who is extremely sexual. She loves the color pink to the extreme and anything Betty Boop. She will use her body to get whatever she wants and 9 out of 10 times she gets it. Her mark is right in the middle of her chest.
The mark of the beast: all of the sins have a mark of a red eye with and a black pupil. They get the mark after losing to john in one of his mind games. With the mark they gain a super natural power as well and the ability to mind link with john, each other, and john’s pets. It looks like a tattoo.

chapter 2

Chapter Two
Well it looks like the end for our main man doesn’t, well your only half right on that my friends. For you see the darkness was actually the other side of his mind. For you see in every one’s body there are two sides, like yin and yang but with light and darkness. Our body tries to keep a balance of the two however it doesn’t always work as the Great Spirit wants it too. Some people let the darkness take over and cloud their judgment; hence the murders and the people who do things that are destructive. This is what has happened to our friend, he is now no longer in control of what happens to him. However it is his dark side that is now in control, while his old self is sort of asleep at the moment.
Now let’s return to the room were the new john sleeps shall we. The two guards that found john on the ground didn’t know what to do. They had never seen a shadow with a halo, let alone someone still being alive from a point blank shot to the face. But all the evidence was there John was still breathing, his heart was pumping blood, which was coming out of the wound in his head, but he was still alive. The guards picked up John and dragged him to the infirmary where they first took care of his wounds. Then they did several tests on him to see how or what made it so that he didn’t die from that shot to the face. In the end the doctors concluded that the bullet did go through his brain but it didn’t hit the parts that controlled his respiratory or cardiac functions. It hit a part of his brain that affects his memories, to be exact the past memories. The doctors did some tests on him and it seems that the new John can’t remember anything before he was shot. The only thing that the doctors know is that John keeps on saying that he has a mission to do and that he must leave and get some recruits for the upcoming war.
The doctors didn’t know what to do with him so they talked to the warden of the prison to get john sent to insane asylum for his own good. The warden agreed after talking to John, it was a weird meeting because John wouldn’t stop smiling. The warden wasn’t creped out by the fact that he was smiling but how his smile reminded him that he was looking at a doll. How John’s eyes seemed to have no life in them like a doll. The warden signed him out so he could go to the asylum just so that he didn’t have to see him ever again. However the warden is still cursed with the image of this doll form of john, even when he tries to go to bed and sleep he sees john. Like he’s mocking him this has caused the warden several problems with his family and will soon lead him to the end of his life. But let’s leave that for another day shall we.
Now let’s return to john and his new home in the asylum. Right when he entered the asylum he felt at peace. He felt the darkness coming from the doctors there and the medicine they gave the people to make them be calm and quiet. He knew here he could find some new friends and some recruits to do his dirty work. But for now he needed to find a way out for when he found his recruits they could leave the asylum when the time was right. He soon met his psychiatrist a young women in her mid 20’s with long black hair. She had glasses, a couple of ear piercings, and a few tattoos. She was very kind to all of the people there and treated them with respect. When john saw her he knew he had to trick her so he could get out and back into the real world and out of this loony bin.
So his plan was to talk to her like nothing was wrong, to sort of put an act on. He wanted to make her believe that he was a normal sane man that had changed. Every time they met he would talk about random things nothing that would make him seem like he was crazy. He talked about his dreams and his hopes. What he liked or disliked about the world and other things like that. But what they talked about the most was her and her life. She told him everything about herself, because she wanted him to be comfortable. She talked about her family about how she had an older brother who kind of seemed like the golden child in the family. She told how she felt alone in her life that everyone cared about her brother more and that she wanted to be a little bit like him. That’s when John threw his trap on her and soon after he started to act like he cared about her, he tried to act like he was interested in her. With this he was able to get away with anything there.
Now he had someone on the inside that was able to help with anything that he needed. However he needed to continue his search for his recruits for his army. So he started to kind of infect the people that left the asylum to do his work. He did this with the darkness inside himself. He gained control of those people and had them go out and find who they thought would be perfect and were able to participate in the games that John had made. Now these weren’t any old ordinary games, these were like tests and the people that failed them became his new minions or recruits for him.
The pieces were falling into place now and soon john would be able take over this world and make it his own personal paradise or utopia. With his plans beginning to unfold John was able to sleep well that night, as he was able to find his first two recruits for his army and his new puppets were soon leaving and looking for the other supposed “chosen ones” for his dark army. In the middle of the night john had a dream that told of the future. In this dream he saw him and seven shadows that seemed familiar to him and in the distance he saw himself or a sort of opposite of himself. In this opposite form he saw six beams of light that people in them that he never saw before. Each one had something that made them unique but one thing that united them all and that was that they wanted to stop john. After this dream John knew he had to make sure that the old form of john never came back and that he had to get people that followed the seven deadly sins. The reason behind getting these people was that these were people who were pure in the way of darkness and that they could never be anything like the those people of the light in his dream. He also knew he had to destroy those people in his dream to make sure that he would be able to rule the world a shape it into his own desire.

Thursday, October 1, 2009

chapter 1

Darkness
Darkness can come out of the most innocent places. Evil hides behind some of the most unstained places. And so, once upon a time there lived a man and his wife. Don’t all fairy tales start something like that? This man, named John, came home early one day and found a friend’s car in the driveway. “Odd,” thought John, recognizing the car instantly. “I wasn’t expecting Jarrod.” Puzzling over the possible reasons, he fancied he saw a pair of horns curling up midair inside his friend’s car. He looked once more and saw nothing. As he got closer to the steps of his staircase he could hear the screams louder and as if they were more of pleasure then pain. Right when he got to the door he felt something touch him like as if it was some kind of hand that had touched his shoulder. Something very cold and with claws.
Then he turned the knob of his door and he saw something that no husband should ever see or hope to see. His wife and best friend were both in the same bed having sex and at that moment something deep inside of his brain like a wire was snapped with something sharp. “YOU FUCKING HARPY HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME, I DID EVERYTHING I COULD FOR YOU HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME I LOVED YOU AND I WANTED TO SPEND THE REST OF THE WORLD WITH YOU. AND YOU WERE MY BEST FRIEND LIKE A BROTHER HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME’’ said John to his wife and friend. “ No, no, no it wasn’t like that way man your wife just had a heart attack, and I was just helping her out” said Jarrod.” “Yeah honey that’s all it was and it’s quite the opposite he saved my life“, said John’s wife. “NO YOU LIERS YOU BOTH DESERVE TO DIE AND ROT IN HELL”. He charges both of them with the intent of murder in his eyes and strangles his wife and while that was being done his friend tries to fight him or do something but with incredible strength John was able to push down Jarrod. Then John blacks out after he pushed his friend away, a few moments later he awakes in a small cell and sees some figure across from him.
It’s his old friend Jarrod, “Ugh what happen where are we” said John in a half dazed and confused sounding voice. “We are here because you are a murder and I am here because I tried to save someone from a monster, LIKE YOU” with that being said Jarrod charged him with the intent of killing him however a guard stops them. “HEY YOU TWO DAMN FUCK HEADS STOP THE MONKEY PLAY BEFORE I BEAT YOUR HEADS IN” roared the guard. “Why the hell am I here please explain this to me, how did I go from being in my house on day and the next day I am here” said John. “One day son you been here for about two months, and you killed your wife you sick fuck, hell you even admitted it in court with a smile that you killed her. We just recently switched you two because you both begged and pleaded that we put you two together in the same room”. “What that doesn’t make sense why would I ask for that, when I tried killing this son of a bitch” said Jarrod. “ Don’t know myself but you asked for him and he asked for you so deal with it, now it’s time for lights out and for me to go home, now be good fuck heads or I will be your worst nightmare“.
As the lights turned off John noticed the same silhouette of a horned beast as he did that one day in the corner of his eye. As he tried to go to bed he heard someone or something whisper “I am going to kill you”. He thought nothing of it and went to bed, however a few hours later he heard it again this time in a louder voice “I am going to kill you”. He awoke and in a panic looked around and saw nothing but darkness. He tried to go back to sleep however he heard the voice again but this time it was like it was screaming at him “I AM GOING TO KILL YOU”. He woke up sweating in a panic tried to find out what was in his cell making that sound but it wasn’t in there. To try and calm his self down he grabbed a cigarette from his pocket and he grabbed a match from the sink and after he lit it he saw something that had shocked and scared every fiber of his body. He saw a giant red demon in his friends bed, John didn’t know what to do he knew one thing though, and that was he had to kill it. He tore out a spring from under his bed and proceeded to strangle it to death until it stopped breathing.
After that John went to bed soundly and didn’t wake up until he heard someone screaming when he opened his eyes he saw Jarrod died and that the guard was the one that was screaming. As it turned out that John was the one who killed Jarrod mistaking him as the demon and as the guards took him to put him into a isolation cell all John could see was different horned demons and from what he saw he knew why he was put on this planet, why he went to this hell hole and that mission was to kill every demon around him starting with this place. As they put him into the new cell he grabbed one of the guards gun without them knowing it and said to himself “ these fools wanted to send me into the darkness however I will be the one to send myself there and kill their king,”. With that being said he shoot himself and fell to the ground unconscious, the guards rushed in and when they tried to move him, his shadow had something different about it. When the guards saw it they both stood still from fear. The shadow had a halo…… of blood.

a little bit about me

Hi everyone, my name is ryan, for thouse who know me yes i have another story here called the twin gods, i am putting this story on here. the reasons why i am putting it on here is because i am bored as hell and also i have been recieving a lot of good props on my writing right so i thought meh run with it till you it breaks. please enjoy the story and if you have any advice or questions please hit me up at my email at hogdragon@yahoo.com. please no dumb crap or being a ass about my writing there is a such thing called giving out bad help.